From: Kevin Trenberth To: Melinda Marquis , Kristen Averyt Subject: Re: Copy-edited Ch. 3 files Date: Wed, 21 Feb 2007 08:18:03 -0700 Cc: Phil Jones , Martin Manning , Susan Solomon Hi all I have ftp'd the updated cleaned up files from chapter 3 back onto your ftp site. The notes accompanying these are attached and are unchanged from yesterday. There are two references that may not be quite final. These are from Global and Planetary Change and we have doi's for them as they are published online, but no page numbers as they do not seem to have appeared yet in print. By the way, there was one notable error in the copy editing which was confusion over significance and confidence levels. I removed all the references to confidence levels when it was about significance (of trends etc). I suspect this could affect other chapters though, so you may want to check that carefully. The main concerns we have are with the figures, please see the comments on the figure files and the brief comments in the attached. If you would like me to make any of these changes (Kristen) or assemble the panels, please let me know. Regards Kevin Phil Jones wrote: Melinda et al, I'm happy with the chapter once all the mods - mainly to the figures - are undertaken. I won't get a chance this weekend, nor the next two days as I'm away. I might have some more time next week, but I too have spent about 6 hours on Sunday and another 2-3 hours on Monday. So Kevin can send back the accepted/tracked version of the chapter, the captions and Appendix 3.B. On the figures, will we get a chance to see the Chapter mocked-up with figures in their final positions and sizes - as we would do with journal papers? There are a number, which we'd like to check to make sure the colours are OK. I think by the way that you have caught all the spellings correctly. I noted 'fall' changing to 'autumn' and the doubling up of letters in words like 'modelling'. I hear also from Keith Briffa that Ch 6 now spells the word palaeoclimatic, although we normally drop the extra 'a' even in English journals. Cheers Phil At 23:14 20/02/2007, Kevin Trenberth wrote: Melinda Thanks Phil and I have made a preliminary pass through the material. As Kristen is now considering the figures, I have attached a preliminary list of the problems. This also includes some material for you: acronyms. More detail is given on the full figure file. We have left USA as is in the main text, but I note that the Appendix B was not copy edited and we have left "United States" there. We have accepted most other changes even though I would not do them this way! We can send the material back now but I will wait for a last check by Phil. (I spent over 12 hours on this over the weekend). Kevin Melinda Marquis wrote: Hi, Kevin, Thank you for reviewing your copy-edited chapter files -- thoroughly and promptly. I'll try to answer each of your questions. About the convention for referring to the United States: As this document is published under the auspices of the United Nations, we are required to use official country names; the United States of America is to be abbreviated as "USA" for such publications. Regarding the lower case "antarctica": We have capitalized "Arctic" and "Antarctic" when they are nouns, and have used lower case "arctic" and "antarctic" when they are adjectives. We used the AMS Word List ([1]http://www.ametsoc.org/PUBS/Authorsguide/pdf_vs/authguide.pdf) to supplement our style guide. The AMS list cites "arctic flow" (adj.) and "Arctic Circle" (noun). We thought it appropriate to treat "antarctic" analogously to "arctic" (the adjectival form). About suggested revisions that seem pedantic: If you feel that inserting "the period" before things like 1961 to 1990 would decrease clarity or change the meaning from what is intended, then you may of course reject such changes. Thank you for your careful review. Kristen will be replying to you about the figures. Please let us know if you have further concerns. We want everything to be correct. Cheers, Melinda Kevin Trenberth wrote: Melinda There appear to be changes that I do not agree with. For instance, everywhere we had "United States" it has been changed to USA. That is not the practice in AMS or AGU journals. I have also found several instances of Antarctic changed to lower case which is surely not right!!!! Some changes are very pedantic: inserting "the period" before things like 1961 to 1990. Kevin Melinda Marquis wrote: Dear CLAs, Thank you very much for your invaluable assistance during the recent SPM plenary meeting. As you will realise there are a few remaining steps that need to be completed before final completion of the WG1-AR4 but these should now be straightforward. This is to ask for your help in the next of these steps which is to check the copy-edited version of your chapter. A professional copy-editor has reviewed all chapters of the AR4 and made some revisions. In most cases, her suggestions implement our style guide (see attached) for consistency in punctuation, spelling, grammar and language style across all chapters, points at which acronyms are spelled out, etc, etc. In a few cases, she has suggested revised wording for the sake of clarity, improved grammar or such. All these changes that might have some effect on the meaning of a sentence are shown in track-changes mode. We would be grateful if you would now go through these edited chapter files and either accept, reject, or modify the copy-editor's tracked revisions and return "cleaned up" files to the TSU. During this step you should also: * make any remaining necessary and minor corrections to text or tables; * ensure that any corrections or updates provided to the TSU since the distribution of the final draft in October 2006, have been included; * update references that have been published recently by inserting volume and page numbers, etc; * add any adjustments to your chapter that arose from the SPM approval process in Paris. Please return a checked file to us with all tracked changes removed. Please also remember to check your figures and figure captions carefully including the axis labels, units used, etc. Annotated text should already have been edited to follow the styles used in the text where appropriate. In some cases we will be doing further improvements to the text fonts used in figures but this is your last chance to ensure that the wording is correct in all places. If you wish to make any small revisions to figures, please contact Kristen Averyt ([2]averyt@ucar.edu) as soon as possible. Please remember that no substantive changes, or new references, can be made to your chapter at this stage. The time line for delivering the camera-ready copy to the publisher is quite tight. We ask that you please return your final text and figures files to the TSU by Friday, March 9. You may access your chapter files at the following ftp site. server: [3]ftp.joss.ucar.edu account: wg1_gnrl password: EQ0KW0WG (Please note that these are zeros - not letters.) directory: pub/AR4_CopyEditFinal/ChXX The file names currently contain "_TSU." We ask that you change these characters to "_CLA" in the files you return to us. Finally please notify us at [4]ipcc-wg1@al.noaa.gov when you have uploaded the checked files. Best regards, Melinda Marquis -- Dr Melinda Marquis, Deputy Director, IPCC WG I Support Unit NOAA/ESRL Phone: +1 303 497 4487 325 Broadway, DSRC R/CSD08 Fax: +1 303 497 5628 Boulder, CO 80305, USA -- **************** Kevin E. Trenberth e-mail: [5]trenbert@ucar.edu Climate Analysis Section, [6]www.cgd.ucar.edu/cas/trenbert.html NCAR P. O. Box 3000, (303) 497 1318 Boulder, CO 80307 (303) 497 1333 (fax) Street address: 1850 Table Mesa Drive, Boulder, CO 80305 -- Dr Melinda Marquis, Deputy Director, IPCC WG I Support Unit NOAA/ESRL Phone: +1 303 497 4487 325 Broadway, DSRC R/CSD08 Fax: +1 303 497 5628 Boulder, CO 80305, USA -- **************** Kevin E. Trenberth e-mail: [7]trenbert@ucar.edu Climate Analysis Section, [8]www.cgd.ucar.edu/cas/trenbert.html NCAR P. O. 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Box 3000, (303) 497 1318 Boulder, CO 80307 (303) 497 1333 (fax) Street address: 1850 Table Mesa Drive, Boulder, CO 80305 Attachment Converted: "c:\eudora\attach\NotesCopyEditCh32.doc" References 1. http://www.ametsoc.org/PUBS/Authorsguide/pdf_vs/authguide.pdf 2. mailto:averyt@ucar.edu 3. ftp://ftp.joss.ucar.edu/ 4. mailto:ipcc-wg1@al.noaa.gov 5. mailto:trenbert@ucar.edu 6. http://www.cgd.ucar.edu/cas/trenbert.html 7. mailto:trenbert@ucar.edu 8. http://www.cgd.ucar.edu/cas/trenbert.html 9. mailto:p.jones@uea.ac.uk 10. mailto:trenbert@ucar.edu 11. http://www.cgd.ucar.edu/cas/trenbert.html