cc: wg1-ar4-ch06@joss.ucar.edu date: Fri, 22 Jul 2005 15:50:04 -0600 from: Jonathan Overpeck subject: [Wg1-ar4-ch06] Re: first set of comments on Ch06-FOD-11 to: Dominique Raynaud Hi Dominique - great to have you back on-line! Please refer back to our emails of July 14 for instructions on providing comments and edits on the current (July 14) FOD draft. In particular, it will be much easier if you provide comments on a section by section basis (edited directly into the Word version of the file), and then send to the relevant section teams below: Exec Summary - send to Peck and Eystein Section 6.2 - DAVID and Stefan Section 6.3 - Dominique, Bette, STEFAN, and Dick Section 6.4 - BETTE, Valerie Section 6.5 - KEITH, Ricardo, Ramesh, Dan, Prof. Zhang Section 6.6 - FORTUNAT Box 6.1 - DAVID, Stefan Box 6.2 - FORTUNAT, Stefan Box 6.3 - OLGA, Keith Box 6.4 - KEITH, Ricardo Note that we asked those in BOLD to be the coordinator for each section - because you were traveling, you escaped this job! Nonetheless, you have to work FAST - see next email. Please start by resending the comments/edits below the to right teams. Merci! Peck and Eystein Dear Peck, Eystein,Bette and Fortunat, Here is a first set of comments on chapter 6 (file:Ch06-FOD-11). If you prefer I can also include my corrections on the file. I hope to have a second set of comments at the end of the beginning of next week. Kind regards to all of you Dominique FIRST SET OF COMMENTS - Contributing authors: please add Jean-Marc Barnola (contribution to the Vostok figure) and Frédéric Parrenin (contribution to the discussion about the validity of the EPICA DC time scale and on the termination of an interglacial). - Executive summary page 6-2, line 16: ...Antarctic temperature and CO2 generally co-vary... line 19 ...indicates that the earth could not enter.... page 6-3, lines 28 and 29: I don't understand the bullet as it is. Would it be clearer just to say: "There is no evidence for century-to millennial-scale modes of natural climate variability that could explain global warming of the last 150 years"? - 6.3.1 page 6-5, line 48: we have two recent (post TAR) references for ice cores, but no ref. for marine and terrestrial records. line 55 delete: (see section 6.?) page 6-6, line 2 delete Figure (6.3.1-1) line 3 delete Greenland line 23 ...trace gases are an important feedback... page 6-8, lines 6 to 34: All this section about glacial-interglacial terrestrial carbon cycle seems to present the state of the art as already known for TAR. I suggest to delete it or to extract only the very few new facts relevant for the future. This will help to reduce 6.3 Page 6-9 line 49 The reference NorthGrip members should be deleted here, because of no relevance with the five glacial cycles. I am not sure what would be the good ref. here. -- Dominique Raynaud Research Director at CNRS Laboratoire de Glaciologie et Géophysique de l'Environnement BP 96 38402 Saint Martin d'Heres Cedex, France raynaud@lgge.obs.ujf-grenoble.fr PH: +33 4 76 82 42 52 FAX: +33 4 76 82 42 01 -- Jonathan T. Overpeck Director, Institute for the Study of Planet Earth Professor, Department of Geosciences Professor, Department of Atmospheric Sciences Mail and Fedex Address: Institute for the Study of Planet Earth 715 N. Park Ave. 2nd Floor University of Arizona Tucson, AZ 85721 direct tel: +1 520 622-9065 fax: +1 520 792-8795 http://www.geo.arizona.edu/ http://www.ispe.arizona.edu/ _______________________________________________ Wg1-ar4-ch06 mailing list Wg1-ar4-ch06@joss.ucar.edu http://www.joss.ucar.edu/mailman/listinfo/wg1-ar4-ch06